MY POEM.... tell me what you think.

I wrote this for english. what do you think? I dont really have a title.....how about....

IN SILENCE

In silence she cries
But she won't let them see
Hurt and alone
She wants to be free
Free of the loneliness
Free of the pain
Because the other kids don’t like her
They say she's too plain.

Inside she is hurting
She's falling apart
Praying for a knight
To come steal her heart.

At lunch and in class
She sits all alone
She looks all around her
While the teacher just drones.

But she won't let on
Just how bad she feels
Sometimes she acts happy
And pretends that its real.

Although she's unhappy
The world smiles on
So she goes on pretending
She's someone she's not.

She holds back her sadness
But when the tears start to well
She runs to the bathroom
So no one can tell.

When she finally gets home
It's like entering hell
Her parents are fighting
They scream and they yell.

She turns up her music
And climbs into bed
The music’s a cloud
Surrounding her head.

Her blanket’s her shelter
Her one place to hide
She feels a bit better
When she climes inside.

When she drifts off to sleep
She finally dreams
Here in her mind
She can finally be free.

Free of the rain cloud over her head
Free of the nasty words her father had said

Here in her mind
She can finally be free
Free of the hurt
Free of the pain
Free of the sadness
That hits her like rain.

whoa,
this is really deep.
i love it.
:]

I agree, the poem is really deep. I love it! Keep up the good work.

Wow. That was really good. I loved it. You are a remarkable poet.

WOW I like it!

this is really nice i love ryming! Though if you would like some critique then I would have to say that the imaging is a little lacking... but I still really like it :)