Intro to my story

Sean Price and Katie Newell sat quietly on the beach, their fingers intertwined as they stared at the rising moon. Katie buried her feet under the blanket as she rested her head on his shoulder, closing her eyes.
They sat there quietly, watching the waves slowly approach their blanket, sending small particles of water across their feet. Katie curled up to Sean and yawned.
“Katie,” Sean said his voice trembling as he pressed Katie to his side, “I love you, you know that right?”
“I love you too, Sean.” She pressed her lips to his neck and smiled up at him.
“And you know I’d do anything for you, right?”
She smiled and nodded.
He reached into his pocket, “Katie,” he said, bringing her left hand up to his lips, kissing it gently, “I love you more than anything in the world, and I want nothing more than to live the rest of my life next to you.”
Her eyes widened, biting her lower lip “What are you saying?”
“Katie, Will you marry me?”

Squishy romance? From you?

^ i second that.
besides the grammatical mistakes, it's pretty good.
i can't believe your writing a novel with romance in it? hehe.

^thirded.

patrick? romance? i didn't expect it.

it sounds pretty good though.

^^fourthded

minor grammatical errors but overall pretty good :)

^fithded [random wording]

Nice Pattie....didn't think you'd ever pull that trick out of the bag, but agreed, small grammatical errors, other then that, looks like your pretty solid.

its not a romance per-say... just a romantic goal for the main character... though i had to scrap this chapter to rewrite it.

I thought you'd probably be doing something to that effect...

missmack123 wrote:

I thought you'd probably be doing something to that effect...

lol and whats that suposed to mean? That i'm a passionless emotionless freakazoid who will never learn to love? xD

possibly.